Creations from Individual Minds

Comments for Jacob:
Hi, Jacob,
I loved reading your story! You have a really powerful voice in the story; it was full of humor and the confidence of your first football game. I especially love the imagery you used, such as, "I just needed to figure out how to get this little jersey over some really big pads." Your conclusion was a reminder of the underlying seriousness of the piece, and it almost had me in tears. It is beautifully written in an open and emotional way, and I look forward to reading more! Great job, Jacob!
Meghan

Hi, Jacob,
I loved reading your poem! I liked how you wrote about how you feel in different situations. I can relate to "cuddling of the couch during long winter days, with lots of blankets." Being inside with blankets and a hot chocolate is the absolute best way to spend a cold, winter day. I also think it is amazing that you work so hard at football that you are willing to get up at six every morning to work out. It is simply hard enough to wake up for school that I can't imagine having to work out before school. Amazing poem, Jacob!
Meghan

Summary:
In both Jacob's story and poem, his voice was incredible.  While I was reading his story, I actually forgot that his football jersey symbolized something deeper to Jacob, because of the amazing humor written in.  At the end of the story, the serious tone of tone of the piece took over when he explained how much and why his first football still means so much to him.  Jacob's poem also did a fantastic job of describing his personality.  He even went so far as to explain his emotions in certain situations.  I thought that was extremely creative.  Jacob has a personal and emotional way of writing that I find a joy to read.

Comments for Daniel:
Hi, Daniel,
When you talked about eating cookie dough out of the package before it actually went into the oven, I started laughing. My mom and I would eat half the package of cookie dough before she actually made them. I also loved how you talked about looking through books at Barnes and Noble. Couldn't you just spend forever in there? Your blog title is fantastic, by the way.
Meghan

Summary:
Daniel's poem was a glimpse of his personality.  It directly shows who he is and what he enjoys to do.  Daniel seems to be an extremely kind and open person, and this shines through in his writing.  I loved reading his poem, and being able to relate to him in different aspects of our lives.

Comments for Mariah:
Hi, Mariah,
Wait...so did the grandma actually go to that beautiful place? She was the young girl in the story? Your story is amazing, and wonderfully written! It left me wanting to know if Delilah would ever find that mystical place with the help of the little white flower. I also loved the imagery that you used in the story; I could picture the the boy deflecting the arrows, and the beautiful little cottages. I look forward to reading more of your writing! Fantastic job!
Meghan

Hi, Mariah,
I absolutely loved the imagery you used in your poem! It helped to depict who you really are, and bring about the creative side to you. I can relate to constantly quoting books, and knowing more about fantasy worlds than the actual world. I'm glad that I am not the only person who finds themselves constantly referencing books. I also loved your line about being a princess, but do not give up hope on your personal fairy tale! It is just a matter of looking in the right places. Thank you for sharing your poem, Mariah!
Meghan

Summary:
Mariah has an extremely creative mind.  In both her story and her poem, she used imagery like it was nothing.  During her story, I could clearly picture what it was that she was writing about, and in every detail.  Her story also left me wanting to know more about the grandma and the little white flower.  Would the granddaughter get to see the wonderful town that the grandma did when she was young, or did it truly exist?  Mariah's poem was also full of imagery that enhanced the poem in a great way.  Mariah's creative style was fascinating to read.