“Do unto others as you would have
them do unto you.” This is known as the
Golden Rule, or the rule that took the privacy out of the world.
My name is Heather Wilkins. I am sixteen years old, and it is currently
2045. I am writing in this battered
notebook in hopes that someday, someone will see the things that I see, and
understand. Note that these words must
be kept hidden from the blind followers of the science of the Revealers, and
only shared to people who can see. I see
things, and not the normal things that people see. My parents and my friends don’t understand. They don’t understand what kind of world we
live in.
After Hitler and the Nazis fooled the world with their
convincing grins and breathtaking speeches in World War II, the world was in
ruins. Americans were flustered at the
sight of the torture that the Jewish people were put through in concentration
camps, and even more horrified that they had no knowledge of it. The German people would have to recover from
being at the top of the world with a ruthless tyrant, and would have to pay the
price. Every other country that fought
in World War II was trying to recover from debt, damage, and an extreme death
toll. Despite the damage that the war
inflicted, it brought about a great change in the minds of the leaders of each
nation. In a meeting now called the
Assembly of Peace, the greatest minds and leaders from each country got
together in the heart of Berlin, Germany to discuss how to prevent such an act
of betrayal and violence, as Hitler’s, again.
This is when the America’s president at the time, Harry S. Truman, remarked
that he could never tell what was a truth or a lie out of Hitler’s mouth.
This is what gave scientists the idea to develop the
“Revealers.” The Revealers are contacts,
specially designed to fit every eye. A
unique technology is placed inside of each contact lens that allows the wearer
to read other people’s emotions. They
were designed to keep the peace; as long as every person knew the other’s
emotions, there would be no misinterpretation of thought or action, and no more
secrets. As long as every person knew
the other’s emotions without misunderstanding, they should treat them how they
would like to be treated.
Lawmakers around the world quickly took to the idea of
the Revealers, claiming that they wanted to prevent “such ghastly violence and revolting
betrayal.” It soon became required for
all citizens in the United States over the age of 17 to get a surgery that
fused the Revealers onto the corneas of the eyes. Citizens 12 years and older would have
reusable pairs of contacts with the emotion-detecting technology embedded in
the lenses. Before an entrance into any
building, each person 12 years and older has their eyes scanned using a
biometric eye scanner that specifically checks for the technology of the
Revealers. If a person is not wearing
their specially designed contacts, the scanner will alert a 24-hour security
team. The person will have no time to
run, because security will promptly show up to take them away in less than 20
seconds. Out of all the people that are
taken away, no one knows where they are taken.
At least, that is what the government wants you to believe.
There is a small amount of people who rebel against
the system of the Revealers. They have
decided that being able to read people’s emotions leaves them no room for air,
no privacy. If everyone is analyzing
each thought that goes into your head whilst in a public space, it is like you
are stripped bare for all to see. Candor
has become the number one priority in society, but not by choice; it was by a
law and a surgery forged out of fear.
Each person rebels differently depending on their
age. Sometimes, children 12 years and
older will take out their Revealers, and walk through the scanners. The eye scanners will automatically pick up
the missing contacts, and they will be taken away. People 17 or above can avoid the scanners,
but if a person avoids the biometric eye scanners for over a month, security
details will check up them to make sure they are wearing their contacts. Many rebels are also caught this way. When a rebel of the system is taken away,
they are taken to an underground facility underneath Berlin, Germany. The Rebels have nicknamed it Auschwitz after
the horrific Nazi concentration camp during World War II that took the lives of
over 1.1 million Jewish people. The name
suits it; for, the rebels are brutally tortured and nearly starved to death,
similar to the Jews that were forced to attend the camp. Once a prisoner is on their deathbed, a torturer
will bring a rebel out of their weeks of solitary confinement for
questioning. They want to know why they
have not been wearing their peacekeeping Revealers.
“Easy,” the rebel will grin through greasy hair and a
racking pain that causes their whole body to shake, “They endangered my peace
of mind.”
A fire will light in the prison keeper’s eyes as he
stares down at his decadence captive. As
these are the only unfortunate words that the rebel has muttered in the last
few weeks, the warden will drag the prisoner back to their dank cell, and
grimly say, “Since it was too difficult to wear the contacts, I don’t think you
have a use for your eyes anymore.” They
will then proceed with the protocol of chaining the prisoner up to the wall,
and brutally stabbing them in each eye to blind them.
As the torturer holds the knife above the bloodied and
convulsing rebel, he will grimly whisper, “Now you will have plenty of time to
think.” The torturer holding the knife
smirks, and hurls the now crimson knife to the floor. “Welcome to Auschwitz part two.”
Now you know the terrible irony of the situation at
hand; the leaders of the world “committed” to peace take rebels of the system
to the heart of the violence to subject them to excruciating pain and
conditions, all for one question. The
leaders of this world have broken their precious Golden Rule, and for that they
must pay. Whoever is reading this must find
the rebels, and spread word of the violence.
Do not give in to allowing yourself to be brainwashed by the idea of
peace by the Golden Rule and the Revealers; people deserve the right to their privacy. My name is Heather Wilkins, and I am sixteen
years old. In two days, I will attempt
to run from the surgery that fuses the Revealers onto my corneas for the rest
of my life. Do not try and find me, and
do not ask how I write this information.
All I ask is that you keep this journal safe, and spread the word.

Greetings, Meghan,
ReplyDeleteI'm not entitled in any way to write this comment, but why not? I enjoyed your story a lot, and it was most definitely original. With some refinement it could evolved into a full-fledged novel. Think about it. Anyways, good job on your piece. It was well written and a great joy to read.
Have a lovely night,
Zachar
Hi Meghan!
ReplyDeleteThis is so creative! Just, wow. You have such an inventive mind. I wish I could come up with things like this as easily as you seem to. It was so surprising and kept me engaged. I hope you always keep writing, you have a real talent!
You're fabulous,
Taylor
Hey Meghan!
ReplyDeleteI liked how you twisted the golden rule into something bad. It made for an awesome story and was very unique! You should write more stories I think you've knack for it! Best Wishes
Dan the man
Hi Meghan. I definitely thought this story was unique. I loved the way you made our history, our future. You took an event that was something that the world will never forget and turned it into something that the world is still going through. This story kind of reminds me of the book, 1984. I do like the Revealers. I love to write fiction and the majority of what I write takes place in the future. You wrote down something that I never would have thought of. Another thing I found interesting is the first person point of view. That last chapter makes me want to know what will happen to Heather. AMAZING JOB, Meghan!
ReplyDeleteWhat an interesting and promising idea, Meghan, one I think you could turn into the next big dystopian teen series! I love the way you describe the rebels' opposition to the contacts: "They have decided that being able to read people’s emotions leaves them no room for air, no privacy. If everyone is analyzing each thought that goes into your head whilst in a public space, it is like you are stripped bare for all to see. " That would be such an unsettling way to live and I wonder if people would stop feeling at all out of fear of exposure. That the rebels would fight to keep their "peace of mind" from being "endangered" is noble and understandable. I love that my flea market ruler sent you in such a creative direction. Thanks, Meghan!
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