Something was
off. The old man could sense it. From where he sat on the park
bench, he could feel the change in the wind, the soft kiss of malevolence
grazing his bare neck. The streetlamp above him flickered suddenly and
burnt out, leaving the old man alone in a night as black as the Devil’s
eyes. Fear began to creep its way into
the old man’s heart, cold and menacing.
Adrenaline made his skin tingle with anticipation, yet he had no idea
why. Then he saw…something. A light, glowing a fluorescent blue, was
fading in and out just down the dark street.
Despite his fear, he felt his feet begin to move towards the fascinating
blue light. It was as if a glorious angel
had come to save him from the suffocating darkness. As soon as the old man was within 100 feet of
the beautiful blue light, it changed form.
It was no longer a shining star, guiding him out of the deep night, but
his late wife, Maureen. She was calling
to him, beckoning him closer. Paralyzed
by a deep array of emotions, the old man stood staring at his deceased wife,
tears falling down his face. As he was
incapable to move, Maureen came closer to him, her blue light illuminating the
street before him. The last thing the
old man remembers was opening his mouth to scream.
***
The little boy
could not find his grandpa. He had told
his grandpa that he would come right back to the park bench after he had
finished trick-or-treating at the local high school across the street. They had agreed upon meeting at the park
bench- his grandpa’s favorite park bench- after the little boy’s plastic
pumpkin was filled to the brim with candy.
Now, he could not find him. After
scouring the deserted street for his grandpa, the little boy eventually went
back to the grey bench where his grandpa once sat, and took a seat. He assumed that his grandpa might have wanted
to do some trick-or-treating himself, as the old man did quite like his Twix bars. The little boy sat his plastic pumpkin down
on the bench next to him, and began counting his candy under the yellow light
of a streetlamp. Suddenly, it became
difficult to count his candy; for, the streetlamp above him began to
flicker. As soon as the little boy
looked up, the light died, leaving the little boy in utter darkness. The boy felt his heart clench like a fist; he
was afraid of the dark. The dark is
where his worst fears could come to life, and were set free. Crippled with fear, the little boy sat
stock-still on the park bench, and listened for any noise in the eerie night. Instead of hearing a noise, he saw a
fluorescent blue light off in the distance.
The little boy could not move fast enough. All he could think about was getting away
from this awful darkness. As the boy
neared the bright blue light, he tripped and fell onto the pavement before
him. At least, he had thought it was
pavement. There was a whole world
underneath him, a world full of suffering, and of hate. Writhing corpses stretched their bony hands up
out of pits of raging fire. Their bloodcurdling
howls of true pain, sorrow, and envy rose up from their flaming graves. A river of shadows flowed in between the pits
of flaming torture, and the little boy could only guess what lie beneath the
inky black water. The little boy had read
about this place, the Underworld. The
sight alone made his body tremble, and horror was set free to tear apart any
rational thoughts he may have. The little
boy was then drawn out of his trance when he saw an eerie blue light out of the
corner of his eye. Turning his head ever
so slowly, he saw that the light was in the form of a person. It was his grandpa, but the little boy did
not remember his grandpa having coal black eyes.
Hi, Meghan!
ReplyDeleteWell, if your goal was to give me nightmares, good job. I'm just kidding, I really loved this plot, and the first paragraph was especially cool. The image ties it all together perfectly. Great job, buddy!
Have A Magical Day,
Taylor Denton
Good morning, Meghan!
ReplyDeleteI will never be able to go to sleep again! Just kidding, I can always sleep. Except when I'm not awake. I never knew you could be so...not-Meghany! It's a good change. This was a really good story, and this is also a really good comment. You should be proud that it exists on your blog. Aaaaanyways,
Have a lovely night,
Zachary
Creeeeeppy! Keep that freaky shapeshifting thing away from me, thanks! Anyhoo, good work with the gorgeous imagery. I loved the description in the beginning especially with the old man sitting on the bench. You wrote this incredibly well, and I am suitably creeped out now. The part with the hellish landscape under the little boy, good grief that's horrible. In a good way horrible, in that you wrote it to be horrible and it was. Excellent job!
ReplyDeleteLater tater!
wow! I agree with them! This was creepy! I felt like I was in the story. I actually have goose bumps on my arms! just like Katie, I was crept by the awful area around the boy. Creepy creepy!
ReplyDeleteOh gosh! Poor little kid! I like what you said about the dark being "where his worst fears could come to life, and were set free." Even as a grown up, I can connect to how scary it is when you can't see what you're dealing with and your imagination fills in the blanks in lots of terrifying ways. Great line: "the soft kiss of malevolence grazing his bare neck." I enjoyed this, Meghan.
ReplyDeleteI am a sucker for similes and metaphors, and this one is fantastic! "It was as if a glorious angel had come to save him from the suffocating darkness." Your descriptive words are great. The very end is totally terrifying. Awesome job!
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