To Taylor:
I will forever be looking at the wisps of wind that blow past me for a ghost, because I do not want her to be forever lonely. Taylor's story made me want to give the main character a hug, and explain that everything was going to be alright. It was a beautifully sad story, one that I hope will eventually have a happy ending.
Hi, Taylor! What a haunting story! That poor man, having to watch as the girl got sucked into the book (especially in the final moments), but still want to be free himself. You did an amazing job of showing his internal struggle at seeing the girl get sucked into the book, and his desire to be free of it. I also loved how you made the book come to life, saying that it would laugh at them, cause them pain, etc. I was also unprepared for the twist at the end, and had to read it a couple of times to make sure that I read it correctly. It was just so shocking! The poor girl! Hopefully, her prince charming will come and save her soon. Lovely writing!
Meghan
Hi, Taylor! This is such a fantastically sad piece! The poor ghost just wanted somebody to notice her, somebody to talk to. I love how you compared the narrator's moments of "dissipation/evaporation" to " like a puddle of water on hot pavement." Brilliant imagery! It was also extremely easy to feel a connection to the narrator, in that you wished that someone would see her. It broke my heart that the her own mother could not see her! I will be looking for her the next time a wisp of air passes me.
Meghan
Hi, Taylor! Your short story was amazing! I loved the suspense and build-up to finding out what was inside the closet, only to find that it was the cat. I also greatly enjoyed the humor that you put into your story, like when the narrator decided that whatever was in their closet must be a ghost (that made me laugh, no lie). Thank you for also teaching me how to make a five-legged unicorn! This was an extremely creative and humorous description on how one could create their own five-legged unicorn costume (which I did not even know existed), all the way from the can hooves to the doughnut horn. Thank you for making me laugh!
Meghan
To Laura:
Laura's horror story me feel the main character, instead of be afraid of them. I hope that is what she was going for. It was an amazing story, full of thought about life and death.
Hi, Laura! This was amazing! I feel so awful for this person, with this particular "occupation." I did love how you described the weight of guilt this person must be feeling, especially with the line, "Shadows of memories came over me that seemed darker than the night sky." Beautiful imagery! I also loved how you put so much thought into this piece. It showed when you were talking about life and death, and how life is a precious gift. I would imagine that someone who often sees death would come to see life as most precious, and possibly fragile. They must see many people who waste their lives. Thank you for sharing this wonderful story!
Meghan
Hi, Laura! Your poem was adorable, and the picture matched it perfectly (I love Charlie Brown by the way)! You have always been so creative, and I never knew that you made most, if not all, of your costumes! That is so amazing and admirable (given there is no way I could possibly do that, or sew for that matter). I hope that your cow costume turned out well! It sounds quite amazing! I also would have never thought that anyone could dress up as sushi, but thank you for explaining how to do this. I am going to have to try this next year.
Meghan
Hi, Laura! I smiled whenever you talked about the clown remembering why he did his job, the children. It warms my heart to know that there is a clown out there (even if fiction) that definitely chose the right job. I also loved how you so clearly described the clown's hatred for the "company of men's" behavior. It was easy to imagine why the clown loved children so much, from his child-like heart to the crude language of the men. The ending was also extremely sweet, as the clown got to dream of a place that obviously made him happy. Even though he was not there, he was still able to imagine himself there. Beautiful story!
Meghan
To Katie:
Katie's horror story gave me the chills! It was brilliant, and there was even a fantastic twist! Katie's style of writing made me want to read more to find out what would happen to the girl and the doll.
Hi, Katie! Well, your story gave me the chills! I know that anything is possible (especially in a horror story), but how did the girl turn into the doll? Will she ever turn back into herself, or is she now "dead"? This was amazing, and I loved how you were able to show the little girl the pain that the doll was feeling. Amazing!
Meghan
Hi, Katie! This was so creative! What a twist on Halloween! To say that Halloween is a day that magical creatures must find safe havens, instead of the usual, "I am coming to haunt humans, eat humans, curse humans, etc." This was such a great story, and I loved the humor in it! Amazing writing!
Meghan
Hi, Katie! I love this story, especially the line, " The fruit she had cultivated all these years, fed with the herb of despair and the tears of the wicked, deceptively shone in her dark kitchen." This is such beautiful imagery! I like how you have the internal conflict between the student of not knowing if she is good enough, and being willing to do anything to get that one little remark of praise out of her mentor. Beautiful story!
Meghan
My Halloween Plans
For Halloween, I went over to a friend's house to watch Harry Potter. We are in the middle of watching the entire Harry Potter series, and watched the fourth movie that night. During the movie, we continued to answer the door and pass out candy to trick-or-treaters, and steal a few pieces of candy out of the bowl every now and then ourselves.
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